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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Sometimes it's like my own mind seems too much for me and no one can understand me. I have a good heart and try to be a good person but people aren't really interested in that.



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    If I counted all my
    tears
    they would equal all my
    fears
    growing more throughout the
    years...
    Is it true am I
    depressed?
    Thought I'd conquered not
    digressed...
    Tell me why
    do I cry
    All Alone???




    Submitted on 2004-07-03 23:37:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      interesting..i like this type of poems like that rhyme and stuff ...i donno know how to write does type of poems Im not good at u so I admire that but its just not my styler sorry
    | Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good! It's simple but it expresses all your emotions very well and it didn't drag on like alot of depressed poems. Remember someone out there is probably crying along with you.
    | Posted on 2004-07-04 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]
      When you think you are crying all alone you are really part of a greater group who are crying together apart. If that makes any sense. Very nice poem. Some people may not appreciate the skill of doing the job so well with so few lines and words. It reminds me of the difference between a hunter and a guide. The hunter carries this massive sword like bowie knife. Then when the hunter shoots an elk, the guide come over with this little pen knife he has in his pocket and field dresses the animal with the fewest possible cuts, so economical in his moves it is a poem in itself, and this is what I would compare your work to, hoping you will find it complimentary.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-04 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      You don't cry all alone...Unfortunatly many of us can't find the right people to treat us well in this lonely winter of tears on this damned planet...I get the same feelings as you alot...Why am I destroyed, why do I deseave this damned lament that quivers and burns my spirit...Why? What did I do to desearve it? And the same for you, why do you desearve it...Alot of people struggel with this thing...Days are dark...But what you have said to many of my poems, that I appreciated such comments and made my day shed a little more light out of those dark clouds of mine, really helped me...Don't feel this way, I know it's hard...But continue to be that person you are, others will really begin to notice, and don't let others bring you down...If this isn't the case, then whatever it is respond to me...But hang in there...You were the one that had a strong faitth on this hope...Don't back down on your worship...Good luck
    | Posted on 2004-07-03 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]


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