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    dots Submission Name: my bluish wordsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsmy bluish wordsdots
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    the sky seems to scatter
    through my nerves
    & nap about me
    unsleeping,
    while you,
    & the heart that you are,
    bleed out
    all these tiny trinkets
    under my skin.

    i'd costume the air
    for you
    if it would bring forgiveness
    for slight mistakes.
    i never meant
    to make a mountain
    out of nothing.

    the clouds
    breathe inside me
    in the night
    & they remind me
    to speak into the darkness
    my secret thoughts.
    the ones that never find
    the constant ears
    of my heart's companion.

    so i'll let out
    my bluish words
    for nothing.
    perhaps,
    simply for the purpose
    of hearing them said.
    & wonder if they will ever
    make their way
    from my mouth into yours,
    past your fruitful lips
    and onwards
    towards your honeyed tongue
    adored.




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