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    Author: TechnoticQ
    ASL Info:    25/M/Royal Oak, MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 359/306/43
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 55
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    Bytes: 704



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    dotsMusesdots
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    Muses, muses, nothing to me but waste
    Why does my tongue so desire their taste?
    For them on their knees, for their sly diseases,
    Just more mad muses; goddamned teases.

    Oh, they smile, when they see my face,
    But only wince at me when I offer embrace.
    Oh, how they laugh, when they finally give in,
    But still see my touch as negative sin.

    They only do what they want to do
    They only play love when convenient to screw.
    They never cry. They never stay.
    All I know of them is them walking away.

    All I offer is anything they want me to be--
    If were all just friends, stop rubbing on me.




    Submitted on 2008-06-26 06:05:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hahah very true indeed
    thats hilarious you mention this because thats exactly how i feel about this girl right now
    she will kiss me any time she pleases but is still somehow my friend, a very true muse indeed

    I thought the flow of this poem was enticing and it was very honest, I liked it.

    good job- bill
    | Posted on 2008-06-26 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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