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    dots Submission Name: lindsaydots
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    Author: Pinky345
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 6/8/10
    Words: 324
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Description:
       Through the past few years, many things have happened, leaving me with different pieces which were recently re-united. My therapist wanted me to express everything that's happened into writing, so I chose to write a poem! The rhyme scheme is a bit random, I know but it's what describes my story, this poem is introducing me tell me what you think!


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    dotslindsaydots
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    Looking through the looking glass ,
    I see a life of three.
    Once so many different faces,
    now belong to me.

    One whole, one heart we all now fit together
    Something says to never fall, we hope this is forever.

    Dark, diluted and innnocence
    driving to the brink
    that was so many years ago, I nearly fell extinct.

    it hurts still now the scars will speak,
    reminding me of what was
    now a life od better path,
    something created cause.

    A cause to live
    A cause to love
    Now in the days I lead.

    I'll tell you once, remind you twice this never used to be.

    Always screaming, fighting blame
    blood poured past my ever vein
    voices, sights made me to shame
    three little girls were all in pain.

    only could one ignore so long,
    fighting back between right and wrong
    tell me god where were you then?
    staring past my every sin.

    The word called trust, I never knew.
    Never said,
    never used
    then you forced it out of me,
    you pushed my chest so I could breath.

    to breathes, to see, to learn to trust.
    Life is more than endless lust
    Tell me how a blind like me,
    was able then, and came to see?

    Emotions new, it always hurt
    never quite aware
    this is love, this is fear your pain is in the air.

    What's feared is brought,
    what's love is lost
    all you can do is face ,
    face the world with every thought
    and it's grace you will embrace.
    these are things I now was taught,
    never will erase.

    Evil is live spelled backwards, forwards
    that is how I now became.
    Kiss me once, and say good bye
    Lindsay is my name.




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      i really enjoyed this piece and the final line was second to none. this is a very descriptive poem seems u been through alot myadvice is things can get worst but u cant give in. keep writing and express yourself
    | Posted on 2008-09-07 00:00:00 | by essence of life | [ Reply to This ]
      That poem told me much, that you have suffered alot.
    Well in the poem there was some parts that didn't have any rhythm. But this doesn't really matter, matters what you feel and matters how you write it, there are lot of poems which have no rhythm and no rhyme

    A advice, i know i am young and filled with hope, but still: Try to see things on the positive side, you may get strenght of these feelings and you may find something good of these things.
    | Posted on 2008-06-26 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]


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