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    dots Submission Name: less the pedestrians, said the nihilistdots
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    Author: wool raincoat
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    dotsless the pedestrians, said the nihilistdots
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    We, the factories,
    and here, the mausoleum, the symmetrical people
    and their lazy theatre.
    The placid chandelier shines pale
    over the foyer,
    the monotone chimes
    sing a flat note.

    We, the factories,
    the suspension bridge
    breaking the wind,

    the vernacular of our city.

    And resonance?

    Last summer
    the pool grew thick with algae
    while I read dry literature
    to impress myself.

    Me, the awkward female.
    This, the aloofness
    that allows this to be.





    Submitted on 2008-06-26 09:03:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The world (according to the Great Nothingness) said "I do not exist except as distant images disjointed in the memory of one who wishes not to remember."

    Sorry, just had to get that bit of ramble out for all to see. That's the result when something like this is written. :)

    It is interesting that you juxtapose experiences in a way that suggests that no single experience is unique. Since factories and mauseleums are bookends to symmetrical lives, then humanity viewed from the eye of an extreme sceptic would be no more tham mindless drones with no particular direction. At that point, humans cease being 'people' and become 'pedestrians.'

    Dry books, empty pools, no inspiration or interaction - such an underlying sense of helpless desparation.

    Very sobering, Sir Wooly.
    Take care.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, well I can't really say much about this one. I feel like it's about the dryness of a full life of going to the opera and reading books just for status purposes. Well, I'll tell ya, I don't know if I'm ready for what you're trying to say yet, so I won't try too hard, haha.
    Be well,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2008-06-26 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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