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    dots Submission Name: Envydots
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    Author: Roselize
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 22/40/27
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    Description:
       Yesterday, I got extremely jealous of a person in my class who go way better grades than me. So, I just wrote this poem to make me feel better.


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    dotsEnvydots
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    It stabs you, it chokes you,
    It fills you with rage,
    Locks your heart and your mind,
    In a hard metal cage,

    For the world is against you,
    And life isn't fair,
    Any you try not to notice,
    And try not to care,

    Your knuckles turn white,
    As you're clenching your fist,
    And the urge for revenge,
    Becomes hard to resist,

    Then you smile through your tears,
    For you hope it is true,
    That someday all the world,
    Will be jealous of you




    Submitted on 2008-06-26 09:42:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all I would like to say that this poem is really excellent. You personified the jealous in a very good way in the first stanza. In the last stanza you described the feeling of the jealous person who hopes that everyone would once be jealous of him/her. The rhyme is so good, as it add much music to the poem.
    Nice work
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by Duke Medhat | [ Reply to This ]


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