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    dots Submission Name: A Circle of Dead Childrendots
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    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    20/m/il
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 90/47/51
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Circle of Dead Childrendots
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    I woke up this morning,
    and the night was hung over.
    Nursing a bellyache and heavy head.
    I truly felt for him.
    I really did.
    But I had to deal with my own regret.

    There's a circle of dead children,
    They are the soil of my garden.
    The only fertilizer that brings
    my flowers to full bloom.

    I remember I was one of them.
    Ripe and unopened.
    A true piece of God's art.
    Crafted by his own hand.
    How I grew and grew.

    The night opened me up,
    with my lover's kiss.
    A tumble over mattresses,
    with her name dancing on my lips.

    She was an angel,
    who made me a man.
    We were lover's entangled,
    in blankets and intercourse.
    I had given her my insides,
    and she gave me hers.

    I was a child once.




    Submitted on 2008-06-26 15:02:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Really good work here. I was intrigued by the title. You do a terrific job here. My only suggestion is ditch the first stanza - it really doesn't fit in with the rest. Nice work!

    Peace, love and all that other junk,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2008-06-28 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]



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