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    dots Submission Name: When I'm Gonedots

    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       They don't have to lie...It's just all we know
    It makes us feel at home

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    dotsWhen I'm Gonedots

    When you see my face again, I think you'll understand

    I'm not the same kid I used to be

    I just thought you should know this

    On the phone, I feel the excitement

    Or at least what you let me feel

    But when your eyes finally find me

    The realization's all too real

    **You only really love me when I'm gone

    I've waited for you for so long, but it's a lost cause

    You only really feel right when I'm wrong

    I can't wait for you to finally see, I won't be here forever

    We used to be so close, nothing ever mattered

    Cross your heart and swear, you'll still be my best friend

    The day you went away, you said to never forget you

    You're face is all too real now, but please just go away now

    I wanted just to hold you, to say it'd be okay

    You're pushing me away, and I'm falling fast

    Since when did miles matter? Since when did they decide

    The rules that we must follow. I swear I won't conform

    **But You only really love me when I'm gone

    I've waited for you for so long, but it's a lost cause

    You only really feel right when I'm wrong

    I can't wait for you to finally see, I won't be here forever

    ***I can't wait for you to wake up

    And see that I'm not here anymore

    I won't be your burden, I won't be your regret

    Or another obligation for you

    Now you can leave your love somewhere else

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      This poem is so sad! But beautifully written. One can really feel the venom in the words. Wonderful job!
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by Roselize | [ Reply to This ]

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