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    dots Submission Name: Not Quite Rightdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNot Quite Rightdots
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    It's not quite right
    To have to wake up alone
    It's not quite right
    Don't pick up your phone

    It's not quite right
    To have to sleep just for dreams sake
    It's not quite right
    To feel down all hours I'm awake

    It's not quite right
    To have to live with only fear
    It's not quite right
    To be unable to shed a tear

    It's not quite right
    To have been left without goodbye
    It's not quite right
    To not be given another try

    It's not quite right
    To have to feel cold inside
    It's not quite right
    To always feel damp when dry

    It's not quite right
    To have to shudder when I hear your name
    It's not quite right
    To know things will never be the same

    It's not quite right
    To have had to fall in love
    It's not quite right
    To watch shadows pass above

    It's not quite right
    To have to acknowledge that you were wrong
    It's not quite right
    To know it's impossible to be that strong

    It's not quite right
    To have a future that seems so dim
    It's not quite right
    To know that you're in love with him

    It's not quite right
    To always have to feel this pain
    It's not quite right
    But the world's not right anyway




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