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    dots Submission Name: That's the Truth Part 1dots
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    Author: Black Angel
    ASL Info:    15/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 12/78/71
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 75
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 649



    Description:
       I wrote this last night when an old friend called me up (yes this is the same person who told me about Kaitlin's death, he keeps in touch with everyone, I do not that why he knows) and told me that my friends Adam commited suiced by ODing on heroin. Why heroin? I have no fucking idea. Why did he kill himself? I think I know, but can not say...
    Anyways, there is a second part that I will be posting, which is basically what I say to this poem. It's basically the opposite of what he said....hope you enjoy~


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    dotsThat's the Truth Part 1dots
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    "I don't blame you"
    He wrote in his blood
    "It's not your fault"
    He said as the needle dragged across his skin
    "It's ok"
    He believed as the needle punctured his flesh
    "Don't worry"
    He thought as his high hit
    "I'll be alright"
    He wished as the venom took control
    "Please don't cry"
    He hoped as his eyes began to close
    "I love you!"
    He screamed as his mouth dried
    "And I regret nothing"
    He promised as cold fingers of death embraced him




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      Woah. Talk about blow me away. This is beyond sad, and I wish upon all the stars in every night sky, that everything really had/did turn out alright. I know it doesn't help much or mean much, but I am sorry.


    On the other hand, this does really have a pow to it. You can tell its a very emotional, heart-wrenching writing.


    ~xoxo~
    Sweets
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually like this, which is strange because I usually try to avoid commenting on poems like this because I never know what to say. I think what got me was at the end where he said "And I regret nothing" and I feel like it's an important line for some reason. Anyways, I wanted you to know that the ending of your poem got to me. I hope these words offer some healing, but I really never do know what to say.
    Be well always,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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