Description: In the ending "she" is not dead, just to clear that up.
That's the Truth part 2 -------------------------------------------
"I'm to blame"
She screamed in her head
"It's all my fault"
She seethed, punching the wall
"It will never be ok"
She cried as the demons raged in her head
"Worry grips me"
She felt as pain tore her heart
"It won't be the same"
She pleaded as her blood boiled
"I can't stop the tears"
She sighed as the whiskey burned her throat
"I hate you!"
She swore as her sanity broke
"I regret everything"
She thought as her body crimpled to the ground
Wow. I read both of these--and commented, and its just like as if I could start bawling right now. Comparing the two, it seems like everything messed up, and they both suffered, but in different ways. It really pulls at the heart strings.
Wow, this seems like the two could be combined side by side, and that there was an underlying love between the two. And the man's feelings weren't returned, it seems sad that he was the one who took his life ever if he was willing to forgive, whereas she held on to the bitterness, but she could deal with it. It's sort of sad in a way, and I guess this is more a comment on what I got from your poetry than the actual poem. I felt like this one was not as poignant as the last one, which would make sense if in fact he felt so much more emotions for her than she did for him. There's so much rawness here, and it all seems to be a sort of cover-up of the love that he and she once had for each other. I guess there's not much left to say on this poem except that it made me think a little. More healing for you.
Be well always,
~Azura*
I have read both chapters of this poem and I have got to tell you this is a Tear Jerker if I have ever read one
True Honest emotion exhibited all throughout the write and it hits even stronger knowing you are writing about true circumstances
My Heart goes out to you and your Friends
I will be Praying for all of you
Excellent Work!!!!
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
God Bless
Ron
Submission Name: That's the Truth part 2
