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    dots Submission Name: Tulips to Two Lipsdots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    26/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    6.24 - 199/132/81
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 87
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 761



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    dotsTulips to Two Lipsdots
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    Tulips

    To two lips

    A passing dream

    In both day and night

    Time spent

    Walking, talking

    Learning that which I most want to know

    Laughing, loving

    Kissing, Hugging

    My arm around your shoulder

    A warm breeze and my fingers through your hair

    Your fingers in mine

    Night’s calm brings silent embraces

    We look into each other’s faces

    And in your eyes I see the stars

    Dreams over

    As we stand together in the street

    You telling me about your week

    I listen

    And begin to dream again




    Submitted on 2008-06-27 13:23:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow it's sweet and dreamy.

    Lovely write. The soft imagery makes the atmosphere so safe and comforting. I really like how touchy feely it is, it allows me to remember the beautiful feeling of holding and loving my boyfriend. *love*I like the way it ends, it feels like there's a sense of continuity like a never-ending dream.
    | Posted on 2008-06-30 00:00:00 | by arodase | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful writing---and dream! I would not change anything about this poem and would wish for this to simply become reality. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-06-29 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple, yet extremely meaningful. I love the way you use ordinary words and make them into something beautiful. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2008-06-29 00:00:00 | by Roselize | [ Reply to This ]
      ignorance is bliss. cloud nine baby
    | Posted on 2008-06-28 00:00:00 | by oneinchman | [ Reply to This ]


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