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    dots Submission Name: over memory lakedots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsover memory lakedots

    as i sip fire
    through the cracks
    where soft eyes
    make dreams
    out of your only weather,
    i'm reminded of the purple heather
    that i gnashed between my teeth
    like purple heather
    when we met.

    it's the slow fingers in the evening
    that become me
    like autumn costumes
    beneath the sheets.
    but even when i dazzle you
    with ancient bruises
    & rust stains that form the wrists
    of my belonging,
    it still seems that i have lost something
    in knowing this release.

    as if,
    vested in the sky,
    even the birds must collapse
    to reclaim their kingdom
    of expulsion.

    i brown, curl
    & upwards towards the sun
    for the sake of love.
    even the trees
    remember me in passing
    as fuchsine shadow
    over memory lake.

    all of you:
    you haunt me before august
    where i'm waiting.
    waiting for the world to catch up
    to the wings
    that travel me onward
    into some fog
    of a future where we'll meet.

    Submitted on 2008-06-27 17:46:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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