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    dots Submission Name: Stormchaserdots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStormchaserdots
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    I've seen the stormchasers on TV.

    Some dumbass person
    will take off in a dead sprint
    in pursuit of thunder claps
    and a looming storm
    to gobble up the peril like
    a kid with their first bowl of ice cream.

    They probably think they're invincible.
    I imagine some hick with a red plaid shirt
    and a toothpick
    talking to a reporter,
    sayin'
    "Me and them tornados? We's friends.
    They wouldn't hurt a fly.
    Someday I'mma lasso one like Pecos Bil,
    good boy he was."

    And their gravestones
    will be engraved with tact.
    "Wally O'Neal, loved adventure."
    But his relatives will scoff
    and start forgetting to leave flowers.

    Somehow I almost get it, though.
    We all gotta chase something.
    Last time I checked I didn't see anyone running backwards.
    We have to make dreams to run toward.
    Some in a dead sprint,
    others in a conscious meander.

    I try not to admit it but you're the storm -
    Go ahead, guess what I am.




    Submitted on 2008-06-27 17:50:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this really really good.
    I mean, I thought it was acutally just a poem about countryfied storm stuff, but I love the ending and the comparison.
    And the kid with the first bowl of ice cream...love it!
    Great poem. Loved the twist.
    going in the faves. :)
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm glad to know this is, actually, a serious piece when you finish it,
    and it had some humor.
    i never really looked at how feelings could be that way.
    and that was a really good comparison.
    it wasn't a typical poem where it has to sound poetic,
    and this metaphor would have been good in either way.
    but you chose a more spoken way, which is better (personally speaking).
    Good Work.
    Peace<3

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    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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