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    dots Submission Name: Only a Heartbeat Awaydots
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    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsOnly a Heartbeat Awaydots
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    Your love is my comforting force
    Tonight as I dream by the sea;
    While hearing the waves wash the shore,
    My thoughts turn to love's memory.

    As twilight brings chills to my skin,
    Your arms are the ones that I long;
    While wind whispers secrets of love,
    Your voice fills my heart with a song.

    My feelings shall never decline
    As sands through the hourglass flow;
    Important as breath is to life,
    Your love is the spark in my glow.

    I'm reaching across ev'ry wave
    On breezes that touch from above;
    When two are but one in their hearts,
    No ocean can separate love.

    Until we're together again,
    I'll sleep in the warmth of a dream
    Where you're just a heartbeat away
    And miles aren't as far as they seem.

    Your eyes have their way with my heart
    Whenever you smile at my face.
    No words can express how I melt;
    One look and my pulse starts to race!

    Each memory speaks of your name
    Until you return to my arms;
    Inside, when my heart skips a beat,
    I float on the thought of your charms.

    As days turn from weeks into months,
    Our love is what's seeing me through;
    Please know 'cross all distance and time,
    I'm charmed by the splendor of you.

    I'm yours through each night and each day---
    and only a heartbeat away.





    Submitted on 2008-06-27 19:22:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a beautiful sonnet. I know, I said that about your other piece too, but you have a wonderful way of depicting scenes.

    This sounded like the characters were two lovers seperated by a war, the man taken across seas to fight, while she stays at home.

    It reminded me a lot of how things are now in America, soldiers being sent across seas, leaving behind loved ones and family members. It's really sad.

    I loved how the woman depicted here hasn't given up her love or hope though, that, with the words you used, she is still faithful and loyal to this man no matter how far away they are. Also, that the memories of him are what keep her going.

    Great write:)
    -Steph
    | Posted on 2008-06-28 00:00:00 | by SheetMusic | [ Reply to This ]
      this was absolutely marvelous.
    you made love completely amazing.
    i'm sooo over poetry/ writing about love.
    you did an incredible job using the most used techniques and system, and making it how it should be.
    the rhyming, vocabulary, format, etc..

    As twilight brings chills to my skin,
    Your arms are the ones that I long;
    While wind whispers secrets of love,
    Your voice fills my heart with a song.

    that is my absolute favorite part.
    you did great and i'm really glad to have read it.
    Peace<3

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      This is absolutely beautiful, Sharon! It is so tender and true! Reading it will make many a heart "swoon"!

    I especially liked

    'My feelings shall never decline
    As sands through the hourglass flow;
    Important as breath is to life,
    Your love is the spark in my glow.'

    Absolutely precious! Nice work, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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