Love's Memory
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Love's Memory
At twilight, when day's done, Moon faces toward the setting sun To bid her rays adieu And smile upon the likes of you. As darkness deepens wide Across the hills and countryside, Each star shines bright and true Just like the love I promise you. Tonight, our bodies soar To heights that speak of evermore In silent moments spent Embracing love with hearts content. Each heartbeat, breath, and sigh Makes passion's flow intensify Until we melt content Within the moment twilight lent. If time could only pause, This night would offer ample cause For nothing else could be More perfect than love's memory. |
Submitted on 2008-06-27 19:24:33 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| As always, an excellent poem from one of my favourite authors. I love the way you personified the moon and the sun, the moon blocking out the suns ray and smiling back on him, I can almost see the moon wicking at you. A Great way to portrait his anxiousness for the memory to be born, As his love for you, your love shines back on him, this love is alive and in you, which makes this more than just a memory. In line two, the meter seems off, it ends in a single beat with the "sun", a great way to emphasise the strong sun or its bright rays, although I do not think it was you intention. Another great write, | Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ] | AH! Someone that understands how to rhyme well. Too often I see people force rhymes out, and they can't work that way at all. It must flow or it will never work right. I am normally against the rhyme, but you do it well so hats off on this. | I also love the idea of finding beauty in the darkness of twilight. I have nothing to offer you but praise here. | Posted on 2008-06-28 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ] | This was a beautiful piece:) I loved these lines: | "Until we melt content Within the moment twilight lent" I thought it was a great view that the twilight had given them this moment, rather then the characters taking it. It makes the poem seem softer overall, more romantic than quick sex. I love the last stanza as well, the idea that this one night should be the temptation time needs to stand still, just for its perfection and love. Truly great write:) -Steph | Posted on 2008-06-28 00:00:00 | by SheetMusic | [ Reply to This ] | Aaah, love's memory! As precious, almost, as the reality! And, a coal to keep love's fires burning always! Lovely, delightful, and wistful love poem! Another excellent poem, Sharon! | | Posted on 2008-06-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ] | |
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