this is very sad to me. I'm not really a fan of suicide anymore because I've had it happen quite a bit in my life, but this was still... It was good. I like it a lot. amazing job with this. I wouldn't have ended this with the line you use as a constant, but it still ended beautifully. So good job.
This poem flowed very smoothly. I like how the actual subject is in code. I've never heard a suicide poem put like that before,but you could feel the emotion on the ...stanzas. It made me sad, but that's a good thing. You already know what I'm about tosay, but guess what? You arr an awesome writer!
As soon as I read the last stanza I knew exactly what this poem was about. I love how you taking something as hard to talk about as suicide, and cutting, and make it as elequent as rubies. Your very talented. TTFN
DiamondTears
This was beautiful. I originally thought this was just a poem about envy, but after reading your other response, and rereading the lines " A girl so beautiful, with so much to live for" I can see how this may be one of the best suicide poems ever. Envy if it is just about envy, it is still awesome, but either way I would claim it was about suicide. It makes is seem that much more deep, and you can get away with it.
Please let me know if I'm wrong, but this seemed to me to be about a girl who has absolute beauty, a great life, and she ends it.
The last two stanzas made me believe this poem was about suicide, and the repitition of the line
"And rubies on her wrists"
almost made me think of a heartbeat.
If it is about suicide, I love that it's not a standard suicide poem. By that I mean the "I hate life just end it now" type. The way you described it as being rubies on her wrists, and compared her to natural beauties and pearls, made it very unique and beautiful.
Submission Name: She Wears Rubies
