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    dots Submission Name: Cheaterdots
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    Author: sugar_sweet
    ASL Info:    20/ Female/ Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 11/8/15
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       me dealing with one of my many issues


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    dotsCheaterdots
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    coming home after days gone without a word
    expecting forgiveness
    expecting to be heard
    meeting anger with indignity
    he plays an innocent man
    but the marks on his body
    betray him from the start
    She begs and pleads
    only wanting the truth
    He argues his innocence
    saying all is not what it seems
    but she wont play the fool
    She learnt how to play his game
    and shes the acception to his rule
    but she will continue to play the fool
    taking him and loving him all the same
    forgiveness is her middle name
    years later and she has been forever changed
    insecure and terrified
    Shes hated herself every day
    picking herself apart
    never feeling good enough
    never being worth a damn
    his actions chained her down
    and she struggles until she breaks




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