Description: this is my most recent poem, after not writing anything for the past two months. i don't know if anyone remembers the "echoes from behind the door" series i had going a few years back (probably not), but i guess you could say this is the forth part in that series.
note: this is the censored version,i know most of you prefer the uncensored version (in that case, just replace the word [singing] for the "f" word), plan on reading this version for the next poetry reading on sunday.
peace!
heaven's door -------------------------------------------
it took seven days to come here
a candle-lit hotel room on the corner of the slums
the door wasn't solemn; stretching toward the clouds
holding up the heavens like the arms of Moses
lest it crumble like the walls of Jericho
the door was unlocked and i didn't knock.
the howling wolves
and wasteland of skulls
took precedence over blazing chariots that
leave more tracks on the sky than
the arms of heroin addicts
there were no [singing] angels
darkness had triumpt this time
when god fell asleep
just as Jacob wrestled with the angel that night
and demanded his wings;
he slept and dreamt of harmony -- sanity
then awoke and painted them gold mixed with fire
burning through the canvass and bleeding into the sky
The door opened and i went inside.
holding a brush and staring into the window as he spoke:
A most potent piece of verse here, and, yes, the Bibical refferrences only add to its potency. It is a tad arcane, but that only adds to the wonderful mystery of the poem. Most well done, indeed! bravo... bravo.. bravo... michael
your imagery is stunning. there are so many references to biblical moments that work so beautifully throughout the piece
the singing/f.ucking angels are brilliant and it works completely well either way
the imagery is dark... so very dark... and the outcome seems rather bleak but we are one...somehow... even if it isnt in favourable conditions i guess.
i dont remember the series you speak of [only vaguely recall half a line that seems in line with this piece]
maybe you could repost it? [or sneak me a peek so i can see this progression/transformation in its entireity..?]
Submission Name: heaven's door
