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    dots Submission Name: Father 'Jude'dots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       One of my poems on my card for my dad (Jude) on Father's day


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    dotsFather 'Jude'dots
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    I'm crazy about this one man
    The sight of him gets me wild,
    With the delight and affection of a faithful fan
    I'm proud to be his child.

    He's honey, caramel, chocolate, raisin
    He's kept me full of awe,
    Nevertheless, if I get a bit brazen
    He'll squash me with his paw.

    But he's a bear, a bear is he
    So very nice and handsome,
    I think I'm no. 1, you see
    'Cause I'm the kid of handsome him.

    Yes, I've got a father, it's this man
    With the perfect daddy attitude
    Go on, you can envy me then
    'Cause I'm the kid of father Jude.




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    ||| Comments |||
      He must be very proud of you, Megan, just as you are of him! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll bet your father is proud of this! Nice work, Megan!
    | Posted on 2008-07-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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