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    dots Submission Name: Can't see past youdots
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    Author: geekyslacker
    ASL Info:    28/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 64/41/14
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1028
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       hello i am color blind, not in the literal sense.


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    dotsCan't see past youdots
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    I am not what I was.
    I have become impatiently indecisive.

    More certain of doubt,
    more unsure of truth.

    Is it new found awareness or utter blindness?

    Lines become more vague,
    yet sides have been taken.

    No apparent guidance,
    make your own decision.

    One thing is clear:

    I can't be this.




    Submitted on 2008-06-28 14:40:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it alot, though the last line i didnt really get (if you dont mind explaining that to me later")

    Your flow is good it all seems to make some what of intelligent sense or common or however you describe it(=

    "I have become impatiently indecisive."
    i like this line because it is so true, when ever someone is impatient they go with what ever their first thought is no matter if its right or wrong....

    Fana
    | Posted on 2009-01-27 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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