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    dots Submission Name: My Paraplegic Lovedots
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    Author: geekyslacker
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 8/17/8
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 52
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    Bytes: 511



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    dotsMy Paraplegic Lovedots
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    The hours,days,years pass by.

    Memories do not satiate me.

    The home I have created in my eyes craves to be inhabited.

    The rooms lit up at the ecstasy of our meeting.

    Beloved come to me,as I am paralyzed by lethargy

    Beloved speak to me, as I am shackled by responsibility.

    Shame

    Ashamed to touch, ashamed to feel, ashamed to believe.

    There is a cure to my illness in which you play no part.




    Submitted on 2008-06-28 14:59:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      luv the lethargy line...wud write more buh gotta get 2 2nd part!!!...
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by Jaiknob | [ Reply to This ]
      i dig these lines they are wicked kool

    "Beloved come to me,as I am paralyzed by lethargy

    Beloved speak to me, as I am shackled by responsibility. "



    u went all rumi onn this iyts koooooooooooooooooooooooooooool

    | Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      dang lil bear this poem is nice. and heavy. i lykie. imma go read part 2 now.
    | Posted on 2008-08-21 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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