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    dots Submission Name: 10,000 Milesdots
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    Author: chilliboy
    ASL Info:    35(!)/M/Scotland
    Elite Ratio:    3.43 - 13/22/14
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 104
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 702



    Description:
       Inspired by making the mistake of staying in touch with an ex.


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    Every day you're there,
    and every day I see,
    we're no longer lovers,
    and can no longer be,

    Every time we talk,
    I feel my heart bleed,
    longing for your touch,
    the one thing that I need,

    I know when I see you,
    I'll want to hold you tight,
    I know I cannot do this,
    but still I'll have to fight,

    Those feelings overflowing,
    bursting from inside,
    need to hold them back,
    swallow them like pride,

    The hardest thing about this,
    is knowing you're so near,
    but you might as well be far away,
    ten thousand miles from here.




    Submitted on 2008-06-28 15:44:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the emotion in this peace. I wish that I just huge the poem it self. I know what it is like to like sombody and have to just suck it up and swallow that love like you mentioned in your poem. It hurts so much to have to do this, because the feelings are soooo strong, and they seem to just take over your whole mind and body, and than to have to just hold it all back and throw it away in a day, is terriflying. Somthing I wish no one in this world had to go through. but it has added somthing to me, a peice of me I never knew I had, strengh I didn't know I was able to find. This poem discribes how many people today sadly have to go through, thank you for writing it, thank you for agknowgling our feelings.

    Grimm R.

    P.s sorry for the really bad spelling, its not my greatest skill. : )
    | Posted on 2008-09-07 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]
      I put this on my facebook. i hope you dont mind. but it describes exactly how i feel. if u dont want it on facebook, pm me, i'll take it off.
    | Posted on 2008-08-11 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG! i absolutely love it! and it litterally made me cry. because i'm going through exactly this right now. its perfect, and beautiful. Wow!
    | Posted on 2008-08-11 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]


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