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    dots Submission Name: The Call of Ashkedots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    19/M/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    7.19 - 135/97/95
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 32
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 556



    Description:
       Just kind of wrote itself as I walked home from work this evening...I don't feel all that well (physically), so I needed a way to lift my spirits.

    And thus, I wrote this.


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    dotsThe Call of Ashkedots
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    Here I am,
    entrusting my spirit to you,
    Oh Skyah.
    Here I am,
    sending up my life.
    I am swiftly the wind,
    I am brightly the sun,
    The son in whom you take delight.

    Here I am, Ashke,
    your beloved one,
    Oh Skyah.
    You are the one who gave me breath.
    But now I return it,
    This life, this spirit,
    And slip calmly into death.

    Why should I be afraid of dying,
    Oh Wondrous One?
    For you shall give me breath once more,
    forever.




    Submitted on 2008-06-28 18:46:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Absolutely beautiful.. This stunned me with its potent imagery painted before my eyes.. It feels somewhat religious to me, but not of any religion that I have knowledge of at this point in time.. It is nice to read something so deep, and yet simple in its interpretation of the meaning of life..
    Thank you,

    Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-06-28 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this had a spaceless and endless feel to it, it was almost like very Universal. Damnit, I hate it when you want to describe something and you can't find the words. This is such a lovely poem, and I have a soft spot for spiritual poetry, and I remember the name Skyah from your story about the cranes. Anyway, there's not much more I can say to it, except that this is a beautiful surrender to your beliefs. Hope you feel better.
    Be well,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2008-06-28 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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