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    dots Submission Name: Skyheartdots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    19/M/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 162/151/126
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 41
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 440



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    dotsSkyheartdots
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    Gaze longingly at the sky. For soon,
    we shall be brothers of wings, sisters of flight.

    With a cry, we shall be released from these
    Earth-bound bodies.

    With a cry, I will lead the flock through
    the gates of the sky. I will burst through the clouds.

    No more shall I be on the earth.
    I shall be aloft forever.
    We shall all ride the thermals
    into eternity.




    Submitted on 2008-06-28 19:27:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I definately like this bit. Very ethereal, very smooth.

    It makes me contemplate riding through the cooling skies in the light of a full moon.

    The title is fantastic as well, is Skyheart a name for the moon?

    Aptly chosen, if so.

    Thanks for the read man, hope to see more like this.

    Much love,

    Keeg.
    | Posted on 2008-09-09 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]


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