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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    19/M/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 152/124/105
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 58
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 754



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       Simple title, not so simple situation.


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    I throw away these pieces of my heart, but the wind
    blows them back in my face.

    I shall never be rid of it.
    I shall never know what it is like
    to not feel pain.

    I have fallen to my knees, stabbed.
    This heart of mine just won't go away.
    Tell it to stop bleeding.
    Tell it to stop drowning me.

    A primal cry, an animal in the wilderness.
    My brother, he too suffers from the deathly heart.
    My sister, she falls under the reign
    of King Corazon.

    My lover, she wants my heart.
    I'd gladly give it to her, I would,
    but it would return,
    ready to bleed once more.

    Take this key and lock the door!




    Submitted on 2008-06-28 19:37:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There are many ways in which to revelate the pain of heartbreak, but I have not read a single piece as vividly and masterly written as this one. "A primal cry, an animal in the wilderness."

    A bit of spanish inserted when fallen under King Corazon's reign.

    Brilliant.
    | Posted on 2008-09-16 00:00:00 | by augustcranes | [ Reply to This ]
      My interpretation of this is how your never really able to forget the pain of heartbreak, how the whole world seems to smother salt on the wound at every turn. Cute lovey dovey speak and hugs in chat all seem to rub you the wrong way.

    Though, towards the end the poem drifts off in the different direction. It takes on a story of its own, and gets more personal. Since weve moved from vague feelings to personal experiences, im no longer able to really relate. But I understand the reluctance to give another your heart, when in the end you know it'd end up becoming just another wound.
    | Posted on 2008-06-29 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]


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