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    dots Submission Name: Chasmdots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    19/M/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    7.15 - 135/98/95
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 36
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 480



    Description:
       Again, simple title, but the message is not so simple.


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    dotsChasmdots
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    The brink, the edge.
    Do not be stumbled.

    Hold on tight.
    The nations are being rocked.

    Hold on to what is right.
    The nations will declare you
    righteous.

    Do not drink with your eyes,
    nor gaze with your
    heart. For everything
    before you is something
    ugly, disguised in makeup.

    Watch where your feet
    rest. May they not rest
    upon the threshold of brothels.




    Submitted on 2008-06-28 19:40:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The message I got from this poem was essentially your dedication to remain noble and moral in terms of relationships and life.

    Though "Do not be stumbled." doesn't sound right.

    It appears your current philosophy is being questioned or challenged, and this is your reaffirmation that you wont stray from your course.

    It speaks of not drinking with your eyes, or getting too caught up in love, because people are fake, and your love will be misplaced.

    At the end I liked you inclusion of brothels and it summed up the poem nicely.
    | Posted on 2008-06-29 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]


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