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    dots Submission Name: What I deserveddots

    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Well this is just emotions for a basketball finals game i played last night... I mean my team lost the series but I managed to be named MVP of the league. It was very emotional for me because in all of my years playing competitive sports this was the only one I had to work so hard for and being named MVP I felt I was rewarded for a lifelong struggle even though it was only 4 months

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    dotsWhat I deserveddots

    Playing my heart out has never felt enough,
    Taking the beating,
    Justifying reasons,
    For not taking the blame.

    With my heart in my hands,
    I'm striding up court,
    Sweat pouring down on the surface,
    Slippery yet I'm balanced in thoughts.

    Playing my all out has never felt enough,
    Until the point I was named,
    Gracefully accepting a monument for my efforts,
    And ultimately lifting it's weight.

    With the sense of feeling there is no tomorrow,
    With my destiny flashing overhead,
    With feelings of this being a new beginning,
    Its a life I look forward to.

    Playing my heart out finally felt enough,
    For the dream was kept alive,
    However, the struggle continues,
    Taking refuge in my mind.

    Finally feeling I was rewarded,
    For feelings I once reserved,
    But playing my heart out kept me going,
    To receive what I deserved.

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      this is a brillant account of your feeling blleding out of your pen. easy to relate, yet put in a mannor only a true artist or should i say poet can do. you have great talent here and i cant wait to see more of your work
    keep it up
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn right you deserved it. You put your all into your craft and you are being recognized for it now. I will tell you one thing this is only the beginning for you. There's a wholelot more in store for you Bri. I can feel it.

    Your success is in the wind,
    | Posted on 2008-06-29 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]

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