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    dots Submission Name: The Angel of Death Rides This Nightdots
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    Author: DorianGrymstone
    ASL Info:    23/male/West Hills
    Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 8/11/13
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
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    dotsThe Angel of Death Rides This Nightdots
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    As the moon rises and the sky turns to black, humanities souls will all be taken back. The Angel of Death rides this night on a horse as white as the sky is black, he has come to enslave their souls for all eternity to full fill their punishment. Humanity has led a life of barbarism, they are finally to be chastised for their abominable sins. The destruction of life and of each other have cast them into an eternity of unimaginable pain and sorrow. Every individual will be damned on this evening, all held accountable for deteriorating Gods greatest creations, they are the greatest parasitic force that this planet has ever known, none will be saved. As Death rides our souls will be stripped from our corpses, to ease our heads he whispers into our ears an entrancing verse, “Ride with me to hell my children where your souls will maimed for your sins. Do not fear you are not alone you will all be there to torture one another. Calm your head for hell is home and home for all eternity, and for eternity we all shall live.”




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      there were a couple spelling errors here and there, (like how you said full fill, instead of fulfill), but i am not overly nitpicky about stuff like that. clearly this is a dark piece, in a non-poetic style, with a straight to the point topic. the angel of death. through the context it is hard to determine who you consider "the angel of death" (azriel, samael, or a rider of the apocalypse), but nonetheless it is expected to put a tad bit of a scare into some people. visions such as this make people think. you should check out the one piece i have wrote so far.

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    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by perihelion | [ Reply to This ]


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