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    dots Submission Name: A Change In Me.dots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    17/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 325/317/125
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsA Change In Me.dots
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    Would you change me?
    I asked that question once.
    You Hesitated.
    I sucked the air from around me
    All of it.
    Nothing left to breathe.
    I feel like glass.
    Seen through for years
    Shattered in your grip.
    Now all the little pieces cut
    Sharp little buggers
    Cut You. And the Strangers
    That tell me you will never be there again.
    I've seen the truth flash in those eyes.
    Those immense cobweb eyes.
    You'll be here all my life.
    Too bad about the good dying young.
    I never said I was good.
    For I was very bad.
    But, no good deed goes unpunished.
    So Hang me by my toes.
    Leave me out to dry.
    I'll take it like a man.
    And Change,
    Say goodbye.
    Say goodbye to your little Fucked up girl.
    And
    Say goodnight.
    I'll take my issues for a walk.
    Isn't that what you wanted?
    Me to change?




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    ||| Comments |||
      hey sweety
    wow !!
    babe I never asked you to change for me
    I love you for who you are
    well I love you .
    | Posted on 2008-06-30 00:00:00 | by anguished_child | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooo...very powerful piece, Kitten!

    i especially love the line about taking your issues for a walk.

    brilliant!
    | Posted on 2008-06-30 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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