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    dots Submission Name: radioactive yellowdots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    17/F/the sea
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 106/271/143
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 52
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    dotsradioactive yellowdots
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    Sunday evening
    we watch the lightning
    lick the sky like angry lizards;
    the humidity clings
    to every centimeter of our
    sun-kissed skin.
    I can hear the neighbor boys
    bursting with a mix of terror and ecstasy,
    simultaneously gasping and
    exclaiming
    as they experience
    the image of God
    splattering radioactive yellow paint
    across a slate grey canvas
    and then quickly erasing it
    with his gargantuan hands
    and wiping them clean
    by clapping off the flecks
    with an unmatched bravado.
    He's crying now, you know -
    big, sloppy tears upon the parboiled earth
    hoping to
    wash it all away.




    Submitted on 2008-06-30 00:11:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this piece, it kind of brought me back to childhood days :). I was always afraid of thunderstorms as a kid but now the minute I see one forming my nose is pressed to the glass and I'm watching in wonder and amazement lol. Very good piece over all, I liked the imagery you created in my mind with God and how he would "clap away" the flecks. Very nice job :).

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    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece really calms me down. It has such an unrivaled imagery that just brings about a feeling of peace, and makes you want to just kick back and observe.
    | Posted on 2008-06-30 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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