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    dots Submission Name: Droughtdots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    17/f/Auz
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 143/222/113
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 74
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsDroughtdots
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    it passes in a blur
    and i can barely stir
    or turn
    away from what's draining me away
    from the outside.

    i can't break
    i can't shake
    or take what's left.
    my heart echoes
    the saddest symphony
    and i'm just watching myself
    become distorted in the mirror.
    the glass rolls across the floor
    not a drop leaves the tap anymore.

    it's heard in my head
    but far from my ears
    i couldn't hold back the tears.
    the open desert doesn't hold much rain
    though it seems to release the hurt
    but fails to release me from the pain.




    Submitted on 2008-06-30 08:04:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this paints a pretty good picture of your feelings, meaning you did really good with your imagery! I got nothing for you to fix though, I like the poem a lot. To me it speaks about a deep internal battle and search for happiness, though only traveling deeper and deeper into a desolate desert of pain and suffering. Really deep stuff, keep it up!

    Take it easy.
    | Posted on 2008-07-01 00:00:00 | by Sirbongatron | [ Reply to This ]



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