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    dots Submission Name: like drowningdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotslike drowningdots
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    this was not god,
    it was a look.
    & how romance
    is more often about losing
    than about it's practical application.
    keep your companions
    in your pocket
    where the fuzz is.
    it'll keep
    pink fiery hells
    from coming in.

    summer is a hot place
    where i soup
    into the air
    like drowning.
    unlike
    soft evenings
    of wisteria twilight
    where i live.

    my olive skin
    searches for its
    gentle counterpart-unlikely.
    somewhere, dead things
    gather in a field
    with scarlet fervor.
    my eyes turn into everything
    when i am speaking.
    & you,
    whoever you are,
    wait for me
    in shadows
    like a dream...





    Submitted on 2008-06-30 17:50:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your poetry stands with emotional grace.
    | Posted on 2008-07-31 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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