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    dots Submission Name: speaking like old filmsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsspeaking like old filmsdots
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    lets make clown eyes
    at each other
    beneath tent-beds
    made of steam.
    i'll send smoke signals
    to you about
    all the lost forest creatures
    i named after you
    in a dream.

    we'll listen to pear bailey,
    make wind of the music
    & the heart that you are
    while raking up stars
    in jars
    & speaking like old films
    at the drive-in.

    make no destiny
    that you become.
    instead let it become you.
    i never want to be a side-note
    when i can be the star.

    i want loose skies,
    clever looks
    & all the humor that i can get.
    make me laugh
    & i'll write you a poem
    you can live by,
    odd, in the early hours
    of another life.




    Submitted on 2008-06-30 21:45:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the imagery in this poem leaves me wanting more! such a way to tell a story. I love this poem to the very end and I do not think that anything needs to be changed. This piece is a pure work of art. Thank you for sharing.
    Ali
    | Posted on 2008-07-07 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]


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