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    dots Submission Name: Raddled souldots
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    Author: Lilyan
    ASL Info:    1 Elite Years
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 42/38/26
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 177
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 270



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       I just don't know any good title to this, so if you have any ideas, give me :P, and when you have something else to say, then say it ! ;)


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    dotsRaddled souldots
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    Broken is your mind
    and raddled is a soul
    one day you were kind
    but know you say: "no!"

    There is nothing left inside
    what was, has gone away,
    I hope that you will find
    again that harmony.





    Submitted on 2008-07-01 14:05:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very nice, short and to the point and done so with a fluidic motion. Love it
    | Posted on 2008-08-11 00:00:00 | by DorianGrymstone | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the flow, and although it's short, the point is made clearly. And I actually like the last line. I would not have thought of using the word 'harmony', but I find it suitable, somehow.

    Fail to think of a title for this though... :p
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]
      It is funny how people can change rather quickly. It is apparent how much you care about whomever inspired this. It is hard to see people lose part of themselves and become a different person altogether.
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      I like all but the last line.
    I read it twice, and I like short poems.
    and I'm not sure but I think I would call it
    Raddled or (Rattled) is a soul


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    | Posted on 2008-07-02 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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