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    dots Submission Name: Next to the Sea's Shoredots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    15/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 10/20/52
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 58
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    dotsNext to the Sea's Shoredots
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    I dream of the sea's shore.

    I can only be kept in these blue walls for so long.

    My mind grows dull and my soul is enraged at this illusion.

    I need salt water washing over my skin. I need the endlessness of blue before me.

    Photographs of a coral reef, a fish tank, anything to make this feel more like home.

    I've never laid in the ocean's arms or had the salty water's touch.

    The ocean is where i belong, I've waited for so long.

    I'm torn apart by the air around me.

    It's never enough. ...Nothing is ever enough. I want so much more than these four false walls.

    I don't crave anything more, someone take me home.

    Next to the sea's shore.





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      you are setting sail which is good. you bringing the ocean to life. great piece
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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