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    dots Submission Name: A Sky Less Brightdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsA Sky Less Brightdots
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    The stars are plenty
    But my star is bright
    However, I cannot see it
    At least not tonight

    Another cloud blocks my view
    It won't even budge
    She's mine get another
    Find your own to love

    My star continues to shine bright
    Even without me there
    How could she be content without me
    She doesn't seem to care

    I'll wait under this cloud until it moves on
    I don't need another star
    For if I leave I may lose her
    So I'll never wander far

    It's pouring now but I don't care
    I can feel it but it's too dark to see
    Occasionally I get a glimpse of her
    Does she get a glimpse of me?

    When a cloud cries it begins to rain
    It will always be raining for her
    So long as he's between us both
    There will be no land only water




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