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    dots Submission Name: I Felt the Iron Winddots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1041/1117/534
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots I Felt the Iron Winddots
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    I felt the iron wind my set face scourge
    Hard at the bow of my ill-fated ship,
    My matted hair, the sneer upon my lip
    Showed well this night the waves would sound my dirge.
    My ship broke up against the pounding surge
    And soon my tattered sails this storm would strip,
    And then, reluctantly, we both would slip
    Beneath the waves then with the ocean merge.

    Down, down I ride my oak craft far below
    The roiling restless storm, the giant waves
    Grasped by some strong and monstrous undertow
    To be but one within a million graves,
    To spend a portion of eternity
    Deep, deep within the cruel and icy sea.




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      That's what the north wind coming down the High Plains feels like; an "Iron Wind"!

    Excellent work, this! In our time, we all will be undone by an Iron Wind, to wreck our ship and blow all fondness aside!!

    Iron men against an Iron Wind; what a romantic, rugged picture that line casts! A delightful, stern read this! Make one want to "batten down the hatches" and furl ones collar!

    | Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece. I really think you could have done a lot more with this. It seems like an unfinished painting. It still looks good, but you know that when it's truly finished it's gonna look magnificent. Best wishes, jeff
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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