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    dots Submission Name: Head Wound Unwound (It's a Fucking Nightmare)dots
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    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    20/m/il
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 90/46/50
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 54
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    dotsHead Wound Unwound (It's a Fucking Nightmare)dots
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    Pull the plug.
    A flatlining aneurysm.
    My brain's pumping jism.

    There a family feasting
    in my head wound.
    The little ones scream,
    whenever they feel me move.

    I'll shake them out
    and pump gas into
    a newborn's half eaten lung.
    Good God what has the mayor done?

    He's built this city on
    an indian grave.
    Call the Priest, Call the warden,
    Call anyone who'll listen.

    The screaming echoes around my skull.
    This self-imposed blasphemy
    is getting old.

    Will you shut up in there?!
    They're always fighting,
    giving me tremors,
    and I cough up nightmares.

    One day,
    these dead pecan trees
    with rise from the ashes
    of cheap cigars.
    They'll shoot their skeletal limbs
    through our homes and cars.

    The factories will close,
    and out comes the degraded mouth pieces.
    The smell of rotting flesh,
    smeared lipstick and putrid feces.

    My head wound unwound,
    I'll never sleep with a capitalist again.
    He raped me,
    and left his seed burning inside me.

    I'll birth this bastard,
    before he eats his way out.
    He's got a neon face,
    and a busted keyboard mouth.
    It's raining in Harlem ,
    this head wound is unwound.




    Submitted on 2008-07-02 17:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      brutal and strangely entertaining imagery. you pull this overall tone off very slickly, which is hard to do.

    anyway, just thought i'd leave a short note to say i enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2008-07-12 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]
      "Will you shut up in there?!
    They're always fighting,
    giving me tremors,
    and I cough up nightmares."

    I really liked this piece! The imagiery is first rate,
    This is deep and I am still analyzing all the connotations.

    You seem to rite with such a bitter edge, I know how poetry is a release for that sometimes, but do you ever rite things with a more positive spin?

    | Posted on 2008-07-07 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      I think its inconsistent. I like a lot of it but other parts not so much.

    The last two stanzas aren't as good as the rest.
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]



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