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    dots Submission Name: I still Love himdots
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    Author: LiLDreamer92
    Elite Ratio:    3.43 - 2/1/2
    Words: 481
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 60
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    Description:
       Fell For a guy Who couldnt or wouldnt fall for me.


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    dotsI still Love himdots
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    Conversation::


    Girl: I care about you
    Boy: I don't feel the same, jjust good friends remember?
    Girl: But i like everything about you.
    Boy: like what?
    Girl: i love your eyes
    Boy: Stop Looking then
    Girl: But i love your smile
    Boy: I'll stop smiling then
    Girl: You have a great personality overall what do i do with that?
    Boy: Forget about it
    Girl: But why i dont want to... i want you
    Boy: I dont want you Screw off
    Girl: FIne im sorry I'll just be your friend forget i ever said that.

    Boy: okay Fine with me, just dont bring it up again.

    Girl: I promise!


    **Cuddles
    Kisses
    Talks
    Closeness**

    (Few Weeks Later)

    Girl: Icant old it in... i care about you to much why cant you just be with me??
    Boy: i thought you werent going to bring it up.
    Girl: i couldnt help it. it builds up sometimes and its hard not to want something so beautiful.
    Boy: I dont really care though.
    Girl: Its not Fair i feel used.
    Boy: how can you feel used, there was no heart involved.
    Girl: .........................
    Boy: i Feel used
    Girl: Your making a joke
    Boy: yeah
    Girl: What ever


    Girl: leaves situation again hurt really bad yet again
    finally learning a lesson....

    Boy walks away Care free and never really cared about the girl because he has no feelings...



    Lesson::

    I've learned not to fall for those who can't fall for you.
    To say no when there begging you yes.
    To walk the other way when troubles coming,
    Ive learned to stay away from those who have potential to hurt,
    potential to take your heart with one quick sweep
    and he took my heart now all i can do is try and weep.

    weep but the tears are dried within my soul
    i cant cry anymore.
    i feel like ive seen it all same talk different guy
    same walk but a different guy
    same attititude just a different guy
    new guy has different atttitude diffferent talk walk..
    and eyes, in which i can see into all the pains of his past and/or present.
    he has soft eyes, they cannot tell me lies,
    and yet his mouth doesnt connect and he hurt me and now im wrecked..
    why fall for anyone when they all
    are the same in the end of the game.
    im tired of playing... i think im gonna quit
    although i am sad of being hurt..
    i dont regret...
    ive learned a lesson in it all
    that ill never forget..
    but there is one thing that he must know
    before i shall go..
    IF YOU EVER DECIDE THAT I MATTER SOMETHING TO YOU I'LL BE HERE.... WAITING..
    __----__----- You Hope___----___----





    Submitted on 2008-07-02 18:23:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      After reading this, i've essentially decided that it wasn't so much a poem, as it was a sort of "journal" entry for your life. So I wont give you any poetic critiques or anything. I've noticed this problem a lot lately, and really, it all comes down to bad judges of character. You fell for this guy wholeheartedly, he had an "amazing" personality. Well let me clear things up...If he was as insensitive as you make him out to be, he was not a good guy at all, and so you waiting for him kind of confuses me. Why does he deserve to have you "waiting" when there are hundreds of lonely good guys out there just waiting for a tad bit of recognition from someone. Its really easy to fake compassion over a computer, and a lot of guys will try to bait you with it, you have to become a good enough judge of character to tell the real nice guys apart from the imposers. I think you'll notice a lot of your problems clearing up if you ever manage that.
    | Posted on 2008-07-02 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]



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