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    dots Submission Name: Carved My Name into Your Sidedots
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    Author: Jakirina
    ASL Info:    19/F/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216/200/80
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 56
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 740



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    dotsCarved My Name into Your Sidedots
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    I hold my pain between my teeth
    sinking into its slug-like skin,
    its smooth eyeless body flailing like a fish:
         slowly.

    Its insides clear and liquid
    bring the taste of canola oil and ash
    as they drip down my chin.

    Once limp I let it fall
              into a skillet
    fry it in baby fat and basil leaves,
    throw in sliced onion and bits of garlic,
    a pinch of ground pepper,

    dip it in ginger sauce,
         chew the head
              then swallow the rest.





    Submitted on 2008-07-02 20:14:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very descriptive, yet very closed. What happened to the carving of names? The title threw me off after reading the poem and the poem threw me waaay off. (nice :D) I liked it, wish I knew what you were talking about, but it was awesome all the same.
    Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-07-05 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      I once heard a poem about fish sticks that was phenomenal. I had me laughing out loud (which I don't often do in public). I like this somewhat if for no other reason than it is different. I wish I could break form the norm, but I just don't have it in me.

    Where did the title come form? Based on the title I was expecting something compleatly different.
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is pretty obscure. I don't have much to say about it. I dig it...I think.
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]



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