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    dots Submission Name: decomposing into colourdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 373
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    strange blood
    & how we came into it,
    these corpses of our enamored lips.
    & the spark
    that would be thrilling
    turned inside
    the palms of our eyes...

    across some sunken ship,
    whose depth
    is more than most can feel,
    i trailed the alcohol
    back to your disheveled hair
    that floated ghostly
    in my endless hand.

    the heart is as allusive
    as the fire.
    it licks away at me
    in my sleep.
    i've seen a figure
    in the distance.
    is it you,
    decomposing into colour
    the way that you do?

    i know where the ground is
    when i'm walking
    only enough to get me
    where i need to go.
    i often lose
    the words in my meaning
    as they always seem
    to be running into themselves
    with some sort
    of forceful luxury.

    i need a city
    of flowers
    to soothe this funeral
    that's from the eyes down.
    death is the place
    between the st ars.
    i'll corset my body-magick
    towards your skin
    if you'll show me
    where the light is.




    Submitted on 2008-07-02 20:43:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece is pretty good, it's definately not the best that I have read from you, but it is still marvelous in it's own right.

    is it you,
    decomposing into colour
    the way that you do?

    That line is just dynamite, and I couldn't think of a better title. That's what drew me to this piece in the first place.

    Best Wishes,
    jeff
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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