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    dots Submission Name: last mind standing dots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    21/Lady/never-never land
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 208/203/66
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 67
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 410



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       We shouldn't have to build robots, there are human beings who choose that life every day.


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    dotslast mind standing dots
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    In pairs they walk by
    Silent
    With forgetful eyes
    True to their nature
    They pay no mind
    To the homeless
    The sick
    The abused and unrefined
    In pairs they walk by
    Obedient
    With warped logic
    So untrue it becomes an illness
    Eating
    Breeding
    Consuming their last rights

    In pairs they walk by




    Submitted on 2008-07-02 21:41:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good work it sounds nice when you read it out loud. yes i actually did that lol. their are a very few people in this world that think of life as a gift and to cherish it to look at it with care. many walk the streets and could care less of anything around them.

    "With forgetful eyes
    True to their nature
    They pay no mind"
    the people walk with no care any more and they are in their own worlds... its sad.
    what i took out form what you wrote is two things Care More About the Environment and Stop Being So Blind.
    its nice to have morals at the end of thigs.
    Great Work!

    Fana

    | Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      I am not sure I fully agree with the actual message of this, but I do like the work itself. The simplicity coupled with the power of your emotional conviction makes it beautiful.
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      I am familiar with the thought of humans like robots. And old man hardened by society, a young man emptied by war, a woman's soul destroyed by one of those men. But in pairs? I'm not really sure if I see them in pairs... other than corrupted businessmen walking together perhaps....

    Anyways. I enjoyed it. Good message.

    -KF
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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