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    dots Submission Name: School Day Horrorsdots
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    Author: xXTorn2piecesxX
    ASL Info:    16/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 2/4/10
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 78
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 733



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    dotsSchool Day Horrorsdots
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    As the School day begins it starts to drag on
    The daydreaming becomes more real.
    The teachers begin to yell, and the students get out of control.
    My mind starts to wander and gets chaotic; i cant concentrate.
    It feels like i want 2 scream but No words come out.
    I want to cry but no tears begin to fall.
    I want you, but you are across the room.
    I want you to hold me and make everything go away.
    I want EVERYTHING but you to disappear.
    I feel like this every time i see you, i start to daydream, and realize i got you forever.
    The Teachers yelling, and the out of control students, just go away when I'm with you.
    You make me feel so special.




    Submitted on 2008-07-03 11:13:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I have to agree with jay, this piece needs some more work.
    | Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Yet again. This piece seems forced, tired, and uninspired. I'd rework it.
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]



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