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    dots Submission Name: Sundots
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    Author: Lilyan
    ASL Info:    1 Elite Years
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 42/38/26
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 169
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 422



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       I just wait that sunshine...


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    dotsSundots
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    I miss your warm ray touch
    i miss that light you gave
    Why you hide yourself
    behind the wide gray cloud?
    Why i don't see
    or feel you anymore?
    Try to brake this cloud to pieces
    try to get free.
    Because you just make
    all those people happy.
    But even if i don't see
    or feel you, i still know that
    you are there in the sky




    Submitted on 2008-07-03 12:07:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the two planes of this piece. Is as if you are comparing the sun with someone you know or your love for sunshine is so great that the sun becomes a real person. Either way a good write on a rainy day like this...
    | Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Warm and towards the end, soothing. Although it is straightforward, do feel as if there's a hidden meaning to this. If that's true, hope that whoever it is that's meant to know about this will. :)
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty sweet. I can't even begin to see all the levels this works on. I have two questions for you based on this work

    A) Did you mean this literally or figuratively? (If you choose not to answer this to retain some of its mystique I will understand)

    B) I have noticed you have commented how English is not your first language, I was wondering if Japanese was? If not that then what is? (If you don't wish to answer cause you don't know me I will again understand.)
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]


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