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    dots Submission Name: Save the daydots
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    Author: Vastmark
    ASL Info:    29/M/U.K
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 225/169/26
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 55
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1087



    Description:
       first edit- change to the second stanza

    Read what you like into it, it's fairly open to interpretation.
    I would say there's a definate political feel to it, but not based on anyone or thing in particular.

    feel free to voice your opinions.


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    dotsSave the daydots
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    There's nothing left here for you today
    Tomorrow holds more of the same
    no more drones wait to obey
    They turned their backs, they've turned away...

    From your
    Burning bridges and stone cold heart
    sick of the lies that cover your part.

    What a crying shame
    What a crying shame
    no one's left to play your game
    You took your chances and staked your claim
    and now there's no one left......
    To save the day!

    You brought us here from the brink of death
    History may recollect
    If you're looking for praise, well don't hold your breath
    since you've dropped us to our knees again...

    Yes you
    Sold us out you stole our souls
    For a twisted dream, you burnt us whole.

    What a crying shame
    What a crying shame
    There's no one left to play your game
    You took our trust and pissed it away
    and now there's no one left......
    To save your day!




    Submitted on 2008-07-03 16:58:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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