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Save the day

Author: Vastmark
ASL Info:    29/M/U.K
Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 225 /171 /26
Words: 162
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
Total Views: 934
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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first edit- change to the second stanza

Read what you like into it, it's fairly open to interpretation.
I would say there's a definate political feel to it, but not based on anyone or thing in particular.

feel free to voice your opinions.

Save the day

There's nothing left here for you today
Tomorrow holds more of the same
no more drones wait to obey
They turned their backs, they've turned away...

From your
Burning bridges and stone cold heart
sick of the lies that cover your part.

What a crying shame
What a crying shame
no one's left to play your game
You took your chances and staked your claim
and now there's no one left......
To save the day!

You brought us here from the brink of death
History may recollect
If you're looking for praise, well don't hold your breath
since you've dropped us to our knees again...

Yes you
Sold us out you stole our souls
For a twisted dream, you burnt us whole.

What a crying shame
What a crying shame
There's no one left to play your game
You took our trust and pissed it away
and now there's no one left......
To save your day!

Submitted on 2008-07-03 16:58:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Damn 61 views and not one comment, Harsh.

Like i stated to someone before (I've been on a commenting spree) I really dislike rhyming sort of poems from those who write on Elite Skills, considering the majority that I've read are usually unbearably repetitive.(though there are some out there that i really like but i have to look like crazy to find something relatively interesting)

But this poem, i honestly love this, it sort of reminds me of the songs we use to sing when we were younger,

"What a crying shame
What a crying shame
There's no one left to play your game"

This is the part im speaking of, it's more of an adult sing along song sort of thing, if im making any sense which im starting to doubt...

I love the way this is set up, your words don't clash (thank god) Over all this is a really kick ass poem. I'm sorry that im being constructive towards this.

Nicely Done.

| Posted on 2009-01-07 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]

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