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    dots Submission Name: simplicity of lovedots

    Author: nansofast
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 2351/2103/268
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotssimplicity of lovedots

    on the journey
    is where descriptions come to light
    we caught "no" as a hostage, rather gallantly
    became blind to it's insistence
    we are the children of almost always land

    and then, love has a way of entering
    when we leave the slightest gap
    in the door, peering through innocence
    weaving two souls and hearts
    who share simple pieces of time
    the same face we turn toward God
    no different than the one that shines
    in our lover's eyes

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      this is so wonderful, truly wonderful the love without reason. Everything is just like it is.... we cannot influence anything we just can hope that our lover responds. This inspiriting poem is beautiful without wanting.
    | Posted on 2009-06-22 00:00:00 | by IvanaIvana | [ Reply to This ]
      Thus on this journey of life I go
    stopping at the crossroads to view my way
    least someone wishes to come along
    to share true love with me.
    That's what I get out of your beautiful write.
    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I find the first stanza intrigueing... I love how you paint a picture of growth - towards enlightenment hopefully where there is only affirmation through positive thinking... hence making the word 'no' obselete, an unkown concept...

    Love enters almost unnoticed and for me the concept of 'love is blind' is portrayed in the second stanza... not so much making the wrong choice but trusting blindly and giving freely of yourself...

    Beautiful poem! Making it a fav...
    | Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Nan,

    Truly elegant and simple, superb images that capture the feeling, and depth of truth.

    "the same face we turn toward God
    no different than the one that shines
    in our lover's eyes"

    Great job!

    | Posted on 2008-08-14 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]

    i just write, y'know,
    and hope for sacred to become
    that ism of pearl lights
    and that journey here.

    the second of three i wrote last night, nan. it seems to carry the same residual love you speak of here, don't you think?
    i hope so.

    shine on, you.
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]
      perfectly gorgeous.. thank you so much,

    | Posted on 2008-07-19 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
      your poetry is a true light. it gives harmony. simple love is the greatest. being you is the best. Great work. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      The simplicity and power of the last stanza, how it is so very true when and where love decides to come knocking; we will never know. This piece to me shows that you should always keep your minds eye open to the endless possibilities out there, never putting up walls that may block that one slight chance a mate for your soul comes around. Very touching and beautiful. Thank you for sharing this with us.
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]
      Let us write...

    what shall we write then?

    perhaps we should explore the solidity of light and the means by which light and love have become synonymous

    is it wise to explore the curvature of God?

    probably not, but every day seems to be a roseate Sunday afternoon in the local library -

    to me
    | Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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