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    dots Submission Name: Trapped.dots
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    Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
    ASL Info:    22/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46/119/104
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTrapped.dots
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    Together in eternity—
    What was hoped for;
    But this soul continues to live;
    Trapped in an empty cell,
    Full of confusion, guilt and hate.




    Submitted on 2008-07-03 21:00:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Trapped, is yet another great poem from you,
    You are a powerful writer and I enjoy the flow you put into them all (easy to follow) would like to see a heavier response with the emotions,
    and maybe some rhyme in some of the pieces I have read so far. all in all I like your work, nice one.

    Jamar2
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]
      This could really turn into one heck of a powerful write with just a little more emotion and maybe some added true life experiences
    Its a Great start but finishes way to quickly to completely capture the readers mind
    If you decide to add more to this Please let me know I would Love to read it
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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