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Trapped.


Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
ASL Info:    22/f/PA
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46 /119 /104
Words: 25
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Description:




Trapped.



Together in eternity—
What was hoped for;
But this soul continues to live;
Trapped in an empty cell,
Full of confusion, guilt and hate.




Submitted on 2008-07-03 21:00:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Trapped, is yet another great poem from you,
You are a powerful writer and I enjoy the flow you put into them all (easy to follow) would like to see a heavier response with the emotions,
and maybe some rhyme in some of the pieces I have read so far. all in all I like your work, nice one.

Jamar2
| Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]
  This could really turn into one heck of a powerful write with just a little more emotion and maybe some added true life experiences
Its a Great start but finishes way to quickly to completely capture the readers mind
If you decide to add more to this Please let me know I would Love to read it
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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