Trapped.

Author: xXCptn_SephyXx ASL Info:    22/f/PA Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46 /119 /104 Words: 25

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Trapped.

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Together in eternity— What was hoped for; But this soul continues to live; Trapped in an empty cell, Full of confusion, guilt and hate.

Submitted on 2008-07-03 21:00:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Trapped, is yet another great poem from you, You are a powerful writer and I enjoy the flow you put into them all (easy to follow) would like to see a heavier response with the emotions, and maybe some rhyme in some of the pieces I have read so far. all in all I like your work, nice one. Jamar2

| Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]

This could really turn into one heck of a powerful write with just a little more emotion and maybe some added true life experiences Its a Great start but finishes way to quickly to completely capture the readers mind If you decide to add more to this Please let me know I would Love to read it Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You God Bless Ron

| Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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