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    dots Submission Name: You Brought Paindots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 745
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsYou Brought Paindots

    I am the raging storm of your time
    I bring forth pain and sorrow
    Leave no hope for tomorrow
    Search for life, I'll leave no sign

    A hurricane well describes me
    You will feel my wrath
    If you cross my path
    All I leave behind is debris

    I will be the silent killer
    Don't need to strike you twice
    Have no qualms taking lives
    Game of death, I'm the dealer

    I am the infesting darkness
    Deep in the back of your mind
    Break my heart and you will find
    I've killed others for much less

    I am the essence of your pain
    Blood and bruises are my prints
    I'm the shatter when your bones are bent
    I am each familiar sting

    I am a wounded, rabid beast
    No use taming, don't even try
    I crave your blood I won't lie
    You broke me and so I feast

    I am the tears running down your face
    Feel the misery and sadness 'cause
    It will never be like it was
    Your chin drips salt, I like the taste

    I am a memory you can never lose
    You may close your eyes
    But won't find disguise
    Feel as I leave, you had to choose

    Submitted on 2008-07-04 04:53:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the darkness you brought to this poem. Many of your poems have a very fragile, delicate quality, which isn't a bad thing. I just like this better. I like that you've brought the variety.

    like killing Po-dunk. It's all about the variety. :D
    | Posted on 2008-07-04 00:00:00 | by Morsketch | [ Reply to This ]

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