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    dots Submission Name: A Slip of the Tonguedots
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    Author: Jaiknob
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 17/17/10
    Words: 333
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 83
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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        An incident happened and I decided to relate it...should be mostly the truth...just was tampered with...


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    dots A Slip of the Tonguedots
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    The momentum was still there. The words were at the tip of my tongue but the realization hit me so hard that I gasped for air instead. What just happened?! But that question was not the one being played in my head over and over again; it was more like: How did I let that happen?!!!
    I hear the words just said again and again. The words are like flowing in my blood. That blood which is rushing in every different direction in my body. My heart is beating at an incredible rate. Such speed just rendered my breathing off-course. Yet, it's uncontrollable due to the pounding of my head as blood rushed to my brain as well.
    Record-speed beating of the heart, amazing rush of blood to the head, gasping for air, my knees are ready to give way. I thank Lord for my hand holding on to that which was next to me. The scene in front of me just leaves me speechless. Words are mightier than swords. I can see the slashes on her heart. The words hit her so hard; she was in pain.
    Being very understanding, she tries to brush off my uttered statement as she knows it was not meant to be said, at this given point in time. She tries to make conversation but I only choke on my utterances. How I wish to help her out! Seeing that we're not really moving on, she just gives in and comments on what I said.
    Getting a hold of myself, I straighten my thoughts out. Lying is definitely not the solution. May be the truth will do; just a bit of fixing here and there(within that truth). Playing with words is one of my fortes. Unfortunately, my brain is not ready to function. I decided to just do whatever i could possibly do. I responded vaguely.
    As I walked out, I lost my composure!




    Submitted on 2008-07-05 23:03:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i remember when u first read this to me. & u were collecting comments from every1 u cud.
    here thats a bit easier. Man Sama Najaa.
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      and thats what happes to people when they lie, lol.
    an amazing peice i could feel the word sinking in as i read it. it captures.

    great write it gives alot.

    Fana
    | Posted on 2008-07-11 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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